When it come(comes) to the accident, people think it responsible for the driver. But last Sunday I see(saw)  a(an) accident. A woman crossed a street when a car turn(turned at) the crossing .it is too late to stop the car ,The women was bad(badly) hurt. The people who was walking along the street took the woman to hospital, (and) the driver came with them.
   
    As far as （I am） concerned, the both sides have responsibility for this, begin（at the beginning）, the woman shouldnot cross the street. Forthemore, the driver should pay more attention. Last. we should take proper measure .Only (when) we take the measure and we （become） more careful can we have a colorful （life） tomorrow.

东方教育点评：(1)本文基本切题。
（2）但有的地方表达思想不清楚，层次不够清楚。如第二段把描述车祸情况和发生原因混为一谈，而最后一段的总结又很牵强。
（3）全文有比较多的语言错误，而且有些是严重的错误。

例3．（8分段）

    At 9:00am October 25st(25th) 2003, I saw a traffic accident on Daxue Road. At that time, I was on my way to school.

    When I turned right on the corner, a motorbike knocked into a small car. The motorbike was red, and there are(were) two persons on the motorbike. The car was yellow. The motorbike fell down, and the two persons on the motorbike were slight injured. The (car) driver came out of the car at once, and asked about the two persons. As soon as I saw that, I made a telephone call to 110.The traffic police arrived in a short time.

   
    According to what I saw, I thought there may be one reason leading to the accident. That was the motorbike kept too short （a） distant from the car. When the car slowed down, the motorbike couldnt slow down in time. So the accident took place.