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Spring is coming quietly by waking up everything slightly. All the creatures come back to life and start to grow. How wonderful the spring is! The rivers are running happily. The swallows are flying back from the south and singing. Meanwhile, some cute animals are busy with their new houses. And the sun shines brightly, directly to our frozen hearts. Everything is kissed by gently breeze. Listen! There are thousands of blossoms muttering with each other, giving off fragrance in the air. What colorful and harmonious scenes!
Spring is the beginning of the year which gives us energy and uncountbale chances. As teenagers, we must take advantage of the significant opportunity to realize our dreams. And we should keep it in mind that no pains,no gains. That is to say, the more we do, the better we will be. Thomas Alva. Edison ever said, "Our greatest weakness lies in giving up. The most certain way to succeed is just to try one more time." Under no circumstances should we give up our goals. No matter what happens, we are supposed to persist our dreams until the end of our life. In addition, we should be optimistic. Do not erase all the progress you have made due to one mistake.
As the proverb put it, "Good beginning is half done." Please let us cherish the short spring, and make our dream come true.

修改老师：Crystal 老师 

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