2、wordy: we are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.

　　improved: we have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.

　　3、redundant: we had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.

　　improved: we had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.

　　4、redundant: my sister and i bought the same, identical dress in different stores.

　　improved: my sister and i bought the same dress in different stores.

　　五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如：

　　1、weak: they will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.

　　improved: they will not agree to any of his proposals.

　　2、weak: i need her financial input before i can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.

　　improved: i need her financial figures before i can estimate our expenditures next fall.