I 　 had 　 a 　　busy 　　 weekend . 　I 　 did 　　lots 　　of 　 things  .On 　 Saturday 　morning  ,  I 　watered 　the 　plants . Then , I  sent  some  emails  to  my  friends . In  the  afternoon , I  didmy  homework .  Then ,  I  played 　the 　piano .  In  the 　evening ,  I  cleaned 　my 　room 　by 　myself .  Then  ,  My 　family 　and 　I 　visited 　family 　and 　friends . 　On 　Sunday 　morning ,  I  fished  with  my  best  friend ,  Anna  .  Then ,I  painted  the  picture .  In  the  afternoon ,  I  read  an  interesting book .  Then ,  My  mother  and  I 　went  to  the 　beach .The  sea 　was  beautiful .  In  the 　evening ,  I  ate  a  big  dinner .  The  food  was  spicy  and  delicious . Then ,  I  saw 　a  film  at  the  cinema .  The  film  was  nice .I  was  busy 　but 　I 　was 　happy  .

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　 I had a busy weekend. I did lots of things. On Saturday morning, I watered the 　plants. Then, I  sent  some  emails  to my  friends. In the afternoon, I did my homework.  Then,  I played the piano.  In the evening,  I cleaned my room by 　myself.  Then,  My family and I visited family and friends.  

　 On Sunday morning,  I fishedwithmybest friend, Anna.  Then, I painted  the  picture.  In the afternoon ,  I read  an interesting book.  Then,  My  mother  and  I 　went  to  the 　beach. The  sea was  beautiful.  In the evening,  I ate a big dinner.  The food  was spicy and delicious. Then, I saw a film at the cinema.  The film was nice . I was  busy but I was happy  .

　　六年级:李勤

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