Nowadays, there are more and more people play with phone everywhere, hence it is a big issue in our society. Some people think that phone is a necessary for them because they have to keep in touch with their friends, customs and parents. Instead, some people think that the phone not only will destroy their relationship with friends but also will not good for their health.

　 Some doctors said that if you over time on using it, it may cause your eyesight is becoming progressively worse. In addition, you can see unusual scenery in our society. For example, people become indifferent and cold blooded because some people over depend on phone to talk each other. It is not only affecting your physical health but also affecting your spirit health. What’s worse, phone will produce some harmful radiation. It is really hurt our brain because it may cause you memory less and even get a cancer.

　 However, phone is not always negative in your life. There is a research said that it is not only can kill your time but can also reduce your stress. Therefore, we have to learn that how to control your time when you use it, and also know that how to use it correctly. In the end, you will be a successful person in your life.

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　Nowadays, there are more and more people playing with their phones everywhere, hence it has been a big issue in our society. Some people think that phones are necessary for them because they have to keep in touch with their friends, customers and parents. Instead, some people think that phones not only destroy their relationship with friends but also are not good for their health.

　Some doctors say that if you spend a long time on using it every day, it may cause your eyesight problem. In addition, you can see unusual scenery in our society. For example, people become indifferent and cold-blooded because they mainly talk with each other on phone. It not only affects your physical health but also your spirit health. What’s worse, phones also produce some harmful radiation which really hurts your brain because it may cause your memory problems and even get a cancer.

　However, phone is not always negative in your life. There is a research shows that it not only can kill your time but can also reduces your stress. Therefore, we have to learn that how to control our time when we use it, and also know that how to use it correctly. 

修改老师：Crystal 老师 

　　三年级:黃欣欣

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