Spring was coming ,The weather became warmer and warmer.The grass grew up from the ground quietly and all the trees weared new clothese, The birds were singing on the trees,They were very

happy.

　　　 Last Sunday, The sun was shinning,I went to Dongling lake with my family and my friend , Gaoyixiang＇s family. I saw many people who were flying kites on the Dongling square.The kids were running faster and faster on the square and all kinds of  kites were flying higher and higher in the sky.Gaoyixiang liked flying kite,But I didn＇t .He played it for some time, But it was unlucky ,His kite was broken.

He had to give up. Then we rode bike of double.It was my first time to ride bike of double,when we w-ere riding bike our mothers fllowing back and the flowers beside of the road were looking and smiling

to us, I felt proud.

　　　When the sun was going down ,we came to back, Today we hugged in spring ,we had a good day.

修改后：
Spring is coming. The weather becomes warmer and warmer. The grass and trees begin to turn green. The birds are singing happily in the trees.
Last Sunday, the sun shone brightly, I went to Dongling lake with my family and my friend, Gaoyixiang and his family. I saw many people who were flying kites on the Dongling square. Some kids ran faster and faster on the square and all kinds of  kites flew higher and higher in the sky. Gaoyixiang also likes flying kite, but I don't like it. He flew a kite for some time. But unluckily, his kite was broken. He had to give up. Then we rode a tandem bicycle. It was my first time to ride this kind of bicycle, we were all very excited. It was very interesting.
We really had a great time there. I love spring!

修改老师： Crystal 老师 

　　高三:薏米莲花

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