真正的朋友-An Friend Indeed

2014-5-9 17:01:55 [大学英语作文]
offer. Just at that moment, Aero called,asking about my health and told me to have a good rest, saying that he would shoulder the responsibility of selecting my English courses for me. Now I am writing this article as the homework of this writing course and I'd like to re emphasize that it is all due to my friend's effort that I have finally made it.
     I was really grateful to him when he called and offered to help and it is hard to express my gratitude with words.  All I want to say about it is that at that moment, I realized that he had offered to help not because it made him feel he was important but because he meant business. He's a man of integrity. I am proud of having such a friend.

简  评
    作者先写什么样的朋友是真正的朋友,然后介绍他就有这样一位能及时帮助别人又不图报答的好友。
    利用选课这样一件事,作者栩栩如生地刻画了有血有肉的朋友。真正的朋友会在你需要时出现。本文描写生病后朋友再次打电话问候,并询问选课事宜。没有比得到朋友真诚而无私的帮助更令人快慰的事了。
    不足之处在于思路欠清晰,段落间缺乏连贯,用词不够多样化。
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