Every little excellence of hers is achieved by sacrificing a great many, including friendship and entertainment, like Edison, Ford, Einstein and Freud.
However, the failure of energy, in our eye, seems never disturb her. She is a fountain of vigor, the fountain that never dries up. While strength is usually bound in numbers, hers comes from within. Without regular meals, without appropriate sleep, even without sincere love,but all above are not half so important as compared with the steps she`s just made. That is absolutely enough.
Burning desire to win, relentless spirit, endless energy,these are something to savor, as we look forward to more spectacular quality from one of the school`s most breathtaking competitor Jenny. Her tenacious performance earned her "the Best Student of the Year", the recognition she so richly deserved.
Yesterday`s little feather is flying with the wind, becoming today`s most captivating Jenny. Let`s come fly with her.

简 评
“逆境出英才”，Jenny似乎又印证了这句名言。Jenny似乎具备一个成功者所需要的一切条件，勤奋好学、努力刻苦、坚忍不拔、勇往直前。
本文最大的长处是语言的丰富多样，显示出作者良好的文字功底。文中不乏精辟的范例，如：“．．．her score last year stands at 4．O，beyond anyone，s wildest dream”；“She is savoring the excellent book ln the library while others are gossiping a certain dress ln the cafe；she is pursuing true knowledge while others are seekingrealloveInthe charmingmoonlight．”等等。另外，本文的结构也很合理，开篇的引言很好地抓住了读者的注意，结尾也点到了标题，前后呼应。综上所述，本文是一篇可读性较强的文章。
(点评教师：张雪波)

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