我的女友-My Girlfriend

2014-5-9 16:58:40 [大学英语作文]

      I hesitate for a moment after writing down the title of this article, because I`ve no idea where to start this story.  My girl friend definitely can not be described by only a few words. Some times she turns to me and asks "Why do you love me?" I am always stuck at that moment and then after a minute or two utter a few words "Because you`re so good." I know my vague answer never satisfies her. But how can I reply otherwise?
     Yes, she`s so good. There`re numerous examples I can cite to illustrate her tenderness, delicacy, warmth and her genuine love for me. A call on the cold winter night, a surprising birth day gift, a pair of gloves that warm up not only my hands, so many times has my heart melted into a sentiment called "being moved".
     I`m not a good tempered guy. However, my girlfriend never loses her temper whenever I am not in a good mood or even say sharp words to her.  At that time, she`d look at me with great care and touch my hands with hers to calm me down.That`s her graceful manner to show her deepest concern.
     I have never written a love letter to her though I`ve received many from my dearest girlfriend. It`s not that I`m unwilling to compose one, but that I find it impossible to convey my feelings to her with written words. We`ve been in love for more than one year. But if once more asked to give reasons why I love her, I guess I`d still say because she`s so good.
     I can`t further this generalized answer into details because it takes me lifetime to do so.

简  评
    本文中,作者描述了女友的种种好处,表达了对女友的真挚感情。作者通过一些语言和行为表现了女友的细心温柔和对他的关心,如寒冷冬夜里的电话、意想不到的礼物、在他心情不好的时候关心他等。文章语言流畅,感情真挚,字里行间流露出对女友的至爱,令人很受感动。如能举一两个具体的例子,少一些抽象的概述,则女友的形象会更加丰满。
    (点评教师:黄莺)