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"I would rather give birth to a pig!" My mother's voice was like a sharp knife, piercing through my ears. She threw my report book at me furiously. I replied in low voice with tears in my eyes, "I...I tried my best! I just couldn't..." My father snapped, "Rubbish! You tried your best? Hundred and ten marks out of three subjects?" He shouted loudly and his face became red. He turned around and took out his rope, I was scared and cried, "Please, please, dad...no!" I clenched my fist, dashed into my room and locked the door. I leant on the door and my heart was beaten like a drum. "You'd better get out soon! Or I will break my way in!" My father shouted angrily. I cried sadly, "Why...my dear father, why would you do this to your daughter?" I took a deep breath and opened my eyes looking around my room. When I saw my dancing shoes, I rushed to them, picked them up and held them tightly. I felt a little better. I wore the loving dancing shoes and started to dance like a feather moving on the floor. After I finished my dance, I was satisfied. I found who I really was and what I wanted to do. I opened the door slowly to face the coming storm. "Mum?Dad?" I murmured softly. "Oh! Here you are! Little coward!" My father threatened me with his rope. I clenched my fish tightly and I cleared my throat. "Oh well! You know what? I am sick and tired of all this! I want to be a dancer when I grow up!" I yelled at him defiantly. My father was stunned for a second, then he continued. "Well,show me then!" I danced confidently in front of my parents. Their eyes were fixed on me and they could not stop looking at me. After the dance, they gazed at me with surprise. "Wow! We don't remember you...having such a talent!" My mother stammered. I was excited as I knew my dance had enraptured my parents. "So...my dear parents, may I write an application to the School Of The Art?" My parents nodded. After that, we hugged together and nobody could stop me from pursuing my dream.  One month later, I stood on the stage proudly...The lights were so bright, but they never blinded me...This should be my new beginning and my new life! 

修改老师：Crystal 老师 

　　初一:顾健荣

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