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My family

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看看我写的English作文,不管这样,给个评价吧!
  Hello,everyone!I'm Wang lu lu.I'm 11 years old.I'm a student.There are 6 people in my family--My grandpa,grandma,father,mother,sister and me,now let me introduce my family members.
  My grandpa is a retired teacher who is just 66 years old,he has a with good knowledge.He often helps me in my studt study.With the help of my grandpa.I make great progress.
  My grandma is 61 years old,but she looks very young.I think she is very beautiful.
  My father is 42 years old,he is a worker,he workers works hard.He is very tall and handsome,he loves us very much.
  My mather is 40 years old,she looks very young and pretty.She takes after us carefully.I think she is a good wife and loving mather.
  As for my sister,she is 20 and she is in a high school,she is good at study studying.
  Last one is me.I'm good at study studying,too,and I like painting.I can draw many things I like.
  This is my family that is full of happiness.I love my family very much.
  • 小学4年级 - 记叙文 - 记人
  • 字数:775 投稿日期:2009-4-10 17:19:00
  • 在文中,你详细介绍了家里的成员,字里行间流露了你对家里人的感情。作为一个小学四年级的学生,写出这样的英语作文,很不错!在文中,用到了一些从句,很好!不过,文中有一些语法错误和拼写错误,你以后要注意以下。继续努力吧,期待你的进步!---- By BBS 2009-4-10 17:46:19


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