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我写的:
    Wuhan is a very crowded city. The traffic in Wuhan is always busy from 6:00a.m to 7:00p.m on weekdays. If you want to go out by bus during that time,you will meet the traffic jam absolutely. There are soma types of transportation that are available in Wuhan below.
     Bus
    It is the most uesful transportation. There are more than 240 lines of buses in Wuhan. Usually I take No.597 from my home to my grandparents’ home. It takes me about 50 minutes. I don’t like to take buses,it makes me uncomfortable.
     Taxi
    Of course taking taxi is better than taking bus. On the one hand, taking taxi can save lots of time and it is comfortable . On the other hand,the taxi is too quick that sometimes it is very dangerous.  The accident always happens on taxi.
     Railway
    About 5 years ago,the government set up the railway.It is really a big success. It was very convinient for me to go to school 2 years ago by railway. I also go to my father’s parents’ home by railway. Till now,Wuhan has 29 kilometers railway lines. I feel pleased about this.
     Ferry
    When I was young,I often went across the Changjiang River by ship with my father. But now,I hardly take ships because more and more bridges are set up above the river. We needn’t take ships. But it is still very important to transport goods by ships.  
 
    If I am the major of Wuhan,I will set up a subway station because most of the modern cities use subway. And I will encourage people to walk and to ride bikes more because it can help profect our environment.
 
    I believe the transportation in Wuhan will be more comfortable, convinient and high-tech. 
 

 
 
uncle改的:
    Wuhan is a very crowded city. The traffic in Wuhan is always busy from 6:00a.m to 7:00p.m on weekdays. If you want to go out by bus during these hours, you will encounter  traffic jam certainly.There are several types of transportation that are available in Wuhan. I will describe them briefly one by one.
    Bus is the most widely used transportation. There are more than 240 lines of buses in Wuhan. Usually I take No.597 from my home to my grandparents’ home. It takes me about 50 minutes. I do not like to take bus because the crowdedness within its cabin makes me uncomfortable.
    Taxi, another useful mean of transportation, may be better than bus in some situations. On the one hand, taking taxi can save lots of time because it does not have to stop like the bus. On the other hand,  taking taxi can be dangerous as many taxi drivers try to cut across traffic swiftly in an attempt to reach their destinations in the shortest time possible. Many traffic accidents involve  taxis.
    Railway is another useful mean of transportation. About five years ago, the government built the railway system. It has been a huge success. When I was attending the first year of junior high school two years ago, railway allowed me to commute   between my home and school conveniently. Moreover , I also go to my father’s pa commute rents' home by railway. At this point in time, Wuhan has 29 kilometers of railway lines. I am pleased about the development of the network.
    Finally, I would like to mention ferry. When I was young, I often went across the Yangtze  River by ferry with my father. Nowadays  
, I hardly take ferry anymore because more and more bridges have been built across the Tangtze River, which have dramatically  reduced the need of ferries. However, ferries still offer a very useful way to transport goods across the river.  
    If I am the mayor of Wuhan, I will build a subway system because most of the modern cities utilize  subway for travelers within the city.  In addition, I will encourage people to walk and ride bicycles more because it can help to protect our environment. In the future, I believe the transportation system in Wuhan will advance  inridership  comfort, convenience and technology . I love Wuhan. It is my hometown.
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  • 字数:3147 投稿日期:2008-11-22 18:44:00
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