> > > > one _ _ _ > I is （am） a fantasy. 【需要注意助动词的用法】
Every day I always in the illusion of happiness, some （something） insignificant.
I only wish I could have personal sad (someone) accompany at me nearby, can never say a word, just looking at me, look at me, help me to wipe tears of canthus. [需要注意accompany的用法]
I just hope I can have fun when individuals and I (we're) together, happy together, share your happiness. So foolishly looking at me, watching, be permeated with happiness.
I just hope I can have individual daze when I looked at him, he is angry to smile, and looked at him, I cannot help all of a giggle. 【里面的错误实在是有点多了，要夯实基础】
Happy, always, always happy moment came to beauty, it is the moment.
> > > > 2 _ _ _ > I am （a） lonely child. [需要注意冠词的用法]
I am lonely.
Hot days, I take air conditioning to 19, like water, bo 'rn into their hearts.
I really feel it caved in, pressure is so heavy, I, mood, others are not experience, I a person cannot afford.
A rainy night, my heart become soft, my heart to heart, although the move, but didn't expect to have another soul in the continuation of my mood.
Flowers are doing their group in the dream, I seem to clean air under foot race hug, enron.
Occasionally, will remind yourself clear if the former ling laughter.
> > > > 3 _ _ _ > I'm stupid kid.
It was unprepared, no panic.
Clearly know, that is not a perfect ending, but I still insist on your beliefs.
At that time, the sun happiness as the leaves.
Then, as the happiness of jade.
At that time, that happiness is like a tall tree.
However, the real happiness, but I can't take to cherish.
It was such a float away, never seen so far, it is looking at me, until now.
> > > > tail _ _ _ >
Look at the window, I saw the blue flowers.
A fire in my sun burn out of the wound.
Scenes excessive, runs fastest and I.
小学6年级 - 记叙文 - 叙事字数：1527 投稿日期：2009-12-8 17:37:00没有改完，里面错误实在太多了。我知道你想用一些好的词汇，用一些复杂的句型。但是基本功不够。还需要努力！---- By BBS 2009-12-26 10:55:27