Spring to soundless and stirless are coming.That blossoming flowers, is her figure.The breeze blows, is her footsteps. The light fragrance of flowers, is her use of perfume.Spring, I saw her figure, I heard her footsteps, I smell her breath.She is coming, who is she? She is spring, spring is coming!

修改后：

Spring is coming quietly. The blossoming flowers are her figures. The blowing breeze is her footstep. The fragrance of flowers is her perfume. I can see her figures, hear her footstep and smell her breath. The spring is coming. 

修改老师： Crystal老师 

　　五年级:孙甜甜

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