What the society must immediately address is to minimize the quantity of any fake commodities and eradicate any opportunity to manufacture them. 146 words 注意现在的作文要求字数增加到了200字左右。

讲评：

1. 类比性思维和写作手法处理抽象复杂的命题

2. 比较结构的句型写作训练

3. 主语从句为代表的复杂句法结构

4. 定语从句的训练

范文二 204单词

Economic boom should bring people a more comfortable and convenient life. Ironically, the more commodities available in a society whose economic fabric is not woven by legal and moral warp and woof , the less and less security the average consumers can have. In fact, even today the public is still jeopardized by fake commodities that flood almost each developing country.

Fake commodities directly harm the average individual consumers in a series of ways. First they are usually inferior in quality and thus cannot meet consumers’ ends. Take a fake watch as an example, it is sold at the same price as is the genuine one but seldom can it give time precisely. Secondly, they might threaten consumers’ health and life in case of fake foods, medicine, and beverages. Some patients are seriously endangered by taking fake medicines. Some even lose their life immediately after eating fake soybean sauces and vinegar. The society as a whole is also detrimentally infected by fake commodities as far as the moral and ethic is concerned.

Then, how to address this serious problem? Most vital is to legally penalize those who manufacture and trade fake products. Second is to educate people how to tell the facts and fiction.

　　以上两篇作文都是非常优秀的。从用词到句型的变化，章法的合理安排等各个方面都已经超越了一个考生能够掌握的程度。所以，单纯从四六级考试来看，都不是适合学生的作文。那么考虑到考生的实际英语水平。我们提供一下两种写法。

　　究竟什么才是优秀的四级作文呢？这个说法本来就比较矛盾。因为四级考试本身就是要求比较低的英文。如何在低层次获得“优秀”实在不是一件容易的事情。

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